Hints to Scientific Writing:
    Wordiness & Retaining a Focus on Biology not the Biologists
 

            Avoid making the biologist the subject of your sentences and restrict citations to parentheses.  Firstly, this greatly reduces wordiness in the paper.  Secondly, how many times have you read a paper that cites the names of people you whom are completely unfamiliar to you.  This detracts from the flow of the paper and only appeals to a subject of readers very well versed in the subdiscipline.  Oh, and it most surely makes Mom and Dad proud.  However, such wording does not facilitate the reader's understanding of the work.  Finally, the use of names personalizes debates where the emphasis should really be on the competing ideas.  A suggestion for a more concise and meaningful statement here is:

Significant sexual dimorphism exists in other species of deer (Bambi et al. 1945, Clarisse 1979).
 
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